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Some believe that people will purchase a product based on their needs and advertising is not needed. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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It is believed by
some
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that
advertisements
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 are redundant because
individuals
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 buy items
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according to
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 their needs. I mostly disagree with
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 suggestion because
advertisements
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 present us
promotions
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with promotions
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 of
products
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 and
thus
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, we may change our purchasing
decisions
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.
Additionally
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, not everybody is decisive to shop
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 certain items and
advertisements
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 form their needs with
introduction
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 of many
products
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.
Firstly
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,
advertisements
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 have a beneficial role
for
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 notifying consumers about
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future discounts and promotions.
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,
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 many
individuals
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 have determined to purchase their needs before, via these
advertisements
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, they would check out their purchasing lists for making better
decisions
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. To illustrate that, a person who intends to buy a computer may be alerted by some
advertisements
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in
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on
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 the web when he or she explores proper
products
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 for him or her. These kinds of incidents usually are beneficial for clients because they take a chance to refresh their preferences.
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, advertising is necessary for people.
Secondly
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, some
individuals
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 do not plan their present or future needs. Ads help them to make
decisions
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 in terms of their preferences.
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, an advertisement about investment can create
an
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interest
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in
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individuals
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 who want to invest some funds in order to ensure their future generations. Without
this
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 presentation, many
individuals
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 probably do not tend to invest their money.
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,
advertisements
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 have a considerable role to bring some
idea
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for
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to
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 consumers. Shortly,
advertisements
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 give
positive
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a positive
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 impact
for
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on
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 people who have
not
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no
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purchasing
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decisions
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. In conclusion, causes and examples can be multiplied with
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advertisements
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are seem
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seem
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 unnecessary
by
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for some clients, in my opinion, they have
positive
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a positive
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 impact on people
such
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 as buying
decisions
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 and learning new ideas about
products
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 or investments. 45 dk.
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