does technology play a role in making people more isolated?

TECHNOLOGY
plays an important role in each individual life.
From
Change preposition
On
show examples
one
side
of the
note
Add a comma
,note
show examples
we can say that
technology
helps
people
in various streams . It gives scope to many unemployed
people
if at all they can have a basic knowledge
about
Change preposition
of
show examples
technology
. But from the other
side
of the
note
Change the verb form
noted
show examples
technology
makes
people
feel isolated because of
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
usage of
technology
. Yes ,
technology
moulds the mind of
people
from one
side
to the other
side
. Nowadays everyone has their own android which not only connects
people
but
also
make
Change the verb form
makes
show examples
them isolated from the world .
This
is because once
if
Correct word choice
apply
show examples
we got attached to it , it turns down our mind .
Clearly
Add a comma
,Clearly
show examples
it can be depicted that it controls our actions and brings
Add an article
the difference
a difference
show examples
difference
Fix the agreement mistake
differences
show examples
in lifestyle .
Technology
harms our social skills. We no longer physically interact with our peers. We prefer social media interaction, Instagram likes makes us feel superior,
technology
Correct word choice
and technology
show examples
, n
zot
Correct your spelling
not
show examples
in
Change preposition
apply
show examples
the just form of social media but
also
the form of games, etc.
are
Correct subject-verb agreement
is
show examples
tearing us apart.
Technology
has positive impacts on our life that we cannot deny but the negative impacts are there as well.
Hence
, we can say that
technology
is like a double-edged sword. Advanced technologies have changed our life pattern and now it has created more social distance. Feeling isolated or alone is not just one negative impact of
technology
. There is a list of the negative impacts of
technology
. Companies put effort into creating the feeling of loneliness or isolation and
then
make their software so addictive that
people
excessively use those tools to feel connected
and
Correct word choice
apply
show examples
eventually their brain feels bored and unhappy and they end up feeling more alone and isolated.
However
, it is up to us to change
this
pattern, we can choose to go out and not use those tools, after all, they are just tools choice is always ours.
Submitted by haliun9499 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: