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Many people believe that it’s better to learn something in a group rather than individually. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #it’s #group
Many argue that learning in a
group
 is much
effective
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 than learning solely. I tend not to agree with
this
 view. Admittedly, learning with a
group
 can be beneficial in some respects. For one, when
people
 gain knowledge through a
group
 discussion, they tend to understand
subjects
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, which they are learning much clearer, as they have a chance to get ideas
of
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 other
people
 on that topic.
For example
, if individuals study difficult topics
such
 as chemistry, they may face some difficulties in
this
 process and they can ask other
group
 members for help to get a better understanding of their subject. Another aspect of it is that in a
group
,
people
 can have discussions on
the
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controversial and tricky subjects, leading to an improvement
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the
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 thinking skills.
As a result
 of discussions,
people
 can
also
 improve their personal outlook and start thinking in broader ways, seeing as they tend to have different views on
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one topic after
discuss
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 it with a
group
.
Finally
,
group
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 can motivate
people
 to speak and
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not fear
to explain
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 their thoughts.
On the other hand
, l believe that learning individually can bring about some brilliant benefits. First and foremost,
people
 who learn things solely tend to have a greater level of critical thinking and they might do research for everything, that they are not sure
, yet
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 in a
group
, most
people
 prefer to agree with others’ opinions over being against them. In
this
 way,
people
 who prefer studying solely tend to have a good grasp of what they are learning, as they have
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for
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 everything on that subject.
Last
 but not least, in a
group
,
people
 may be distracted by others and feel ashamed to say their thoughts,
while
 in individual learning processes,
people
 have a chance to think clearly without being afflicted by other
people
 around.
Thus
, learning individually
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 not put pointless pressure on
people
 and they tend to learn in a more immersive way. In conclusion, it is worth admitting that there are several advantages, which
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 from learning in a
group
, yet l do not believe that learning in a
group
 is more advantageous than solely.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • collaborative problem-solving
  • exchange of ideas
  • peer support
  • social interaction
  • fosters
  • enrich
  • perspective
  • motivate
  • isolation
  • feedback
  • misconceptions
  • self-paced
  • retention
  • self-discipline
  • lifelong learning
  • customization
  • engagement
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