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The plans below show the ground floor of a public library in one city in 1975 and the same library in 2015.

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The maps illustrate how the public library's first floor changed over a 40-year period, from 1975 to 2015.
Overall
, the reason behind all these developments was to expand the number of seats by minimizing the number of
bookshelves
,
as well as
 making the library spacious.
To begin
, reference books and maps in the left-hand corner were replaced by a number of computers. All
bookshelves
 in rows were disposed of to make a place for a couple of sofas, one facing a new coffee machine. The study area was updated and moved to the centre, allowing new books to settle on
instead
. In spite of all these improvements, the
bookshelves
 on the left, the librarian's desk and
toilets
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 remained unchanged.
According to
 the right side of the library, a bunch of sittings were put around children's books, near which
bookshelves
 were located. The self-checkout area took the place of newspapers, and a ramp with wheelchair access was added near it.
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