In many countries, children show less respect to elders. What are the causes of such behavior? What can be done to address this situation?

Nowadays, people are living in a society that
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doesn't
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recognize the
importance
of
values
. One of the main
values
whose lack is more visible around the world is
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Respect
. It is actually a sad
situation
because
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respect
is the basis of
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freedom
, if we don'
t
respect
each other, we will cross the line between their
freedom
and ours.
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family's
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structure can be
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observed
that
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behavior
in children is
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of the
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behaviour
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behavior
of their
parents
. First , the lack of
values
that we are living in the actual world, is a consequence of the greater
importance
that we are giving to
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freedom
.
Although
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freedom
is an
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important
value, we can'
t
give more
importance
than we give to the rest of
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,
such
as
respect
or
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empathy
. It is
this
relevance that we have
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to the
freedom
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the world in a place
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without
values
. Thereby we find children on the street who don'
t
respect
anybody, and they think that can do whatever they want,
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without
consequences. Second , when we analyze the family's
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behavior
, we
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that even
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is no
respect
between fathers and sons,
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what can we expect from the son toward their grandparents if they always look
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parents
acting
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without
respect
toward their own
parents
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The example is the principal way to learn
values
,
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learn by repeating
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behaviors .
For example
, if my son looks at me, always
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and impatient when I come back home, they will repeat
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behavior
when they arrive from their school.
To conclude
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the general
situation
, can be seen that if we reinforce the
importance
of the
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values
we can address
this
situation
. Incorporating subjects in
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school
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early
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years
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can give
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the kids the knowledge that they need to turn in a good way
this
situation
.
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home ,
parents
must escape from their routines and get time to share with their sons and
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the
values
as behaviors that
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each other.
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