The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The pie charts below illustrate the
percentage
of
time
which was spent by working adults on different kinds of activities in one country in 1958 and 2008.
Overall
, employees'
time
spent on work was higher than that of other activities in each year (33% and 42% particularly).
In addition
, the
percentage
of working hours increased by 9% from 1958 to 2008.
Also
,
time
spent on travelling to work rose to 8% in 2008, which was only 2% in 1958. Workers'
percentage
of
time
for sleeping decreased from 32% to 25% between 1958 and 2008.
Furthermore
, in 1958, they used to go out with their close people almost one-fifth of the
time
.
However
, in 2008,
this
count fell to 6%, which is the lowest
percentage
of
time
in that year.
On the other hand
,
time
spent on other interests grew to 8% in 2008, which was 6% in 1958, and they started to relax at home more, which
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