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Human activity has had a negative effect on plants and animal all over the world. Some people think that it is too late to do something about it. Others think there is still time to take effective action. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Human lifestyle has been causing bad impacts on
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nature for centuries,
for instance
, deforestation, hunting, pollution, and exploitation of resources. Plants and animals over the world are surely affected. Many trees
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 been cut down for producing
papers
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paper
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 and for
comstuctions
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constructions
construction
. Creatures
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 been hunted for many reasons,
such
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fur,
for
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meat,
for
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horns,
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the
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leather, or even
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amusement. The world population indeed
accknowleges
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acknowledges
 about
this
 issue, some people insist that there's enough time for
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change,
whereas
 some people find that it is too late. First of all, one side of
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society
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 that there's sufficient time for the
nacessary
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necessary
 actions to be applied.
This
 group of people think that if each human
beings
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 cooperate with
this
 idea, they can reduce the
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negative
affects
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 on
the
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nature.
Worldwidely
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Worldwide
, there's plenty
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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