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The graph below shows the population of India and China from the year 2000 to the present day with projections for growth to the year 2050.

The graph below shows the population of India and China from the year 2000 to the present day with projections for growth to the year 2050.
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The
graph
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 illustrates the
population
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 of
India
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 and
China
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 from the year 2000 to the present day, with projections for growth up to the year 2050. As can be seen from the
graph
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, both
India
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 and
China
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 have experienced a significant increase in
population
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 over the past two decades. In the year 2000,
India
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's
population
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 was just under 1
billion
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,
while
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China
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's
population
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 was around 1.2
billion
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. By 2021,
India
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's
population
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 had risen to around 1.3
billion
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,
while
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China
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's
population
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 had reached over 1.4
billion
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. Looking ahead to 2050, the
graph
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 shows that
India
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's
population
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 is projected to continue to increase, reaching around 1.64
billion
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 people.
In contrast
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,
China
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's
population
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 is projected to decrease to around 1.3
billion
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 people.
This
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 is likely
due to
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China
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's
aging
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population
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 and low birth rate. In conclusion, the
graph
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 highlights the contrasting
population
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 trends in
India
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 and
China
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 over the past two decades and provides projections for future
population
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 growth.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 85%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graph, population, india, china, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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