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The table below shows the results of a survey of the average number of cars travelling through three suburban roads during working hours in a 10-year pollution monitoring programme. Traffic calming was introduced in Harper Lane at the beginning of 1999

The table below shows the results of a survey of the average number of cars travelling through three suburban roads during working hours in a 10-year pollution monitoring programme. Traffic calming was introduced in Harper Lane at the beginning of 1999
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Overall
,
Chart
Correct article usage
the Chart
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illstruates
Correct your spelling
illustrates
average
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an average
the average
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number
 of
cars
traveling
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travelling
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 through
Harper
Lane
, Great York
Lane
,
Long
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and Long
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Lane
 started from 1993 to 2002. Each suburban
areas
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area
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were
Unnecessary verb
apply
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steadily
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a steadily
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 increased
number
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a number
the number
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 of
traveling
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travelling
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cars
 except
Harper
Lane
 from 1998
to1999
Correct your spelling
to 1999
. At that time,
Harper
Lane
's
number
 of
cars
 in 1999 dropped
down
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by
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 more than
one fourth
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one-fourth
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compare
Wrong verb form
compared
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 to
in
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apply
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1998.
Harper
Lane
was
Unnecessary verb
apply
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always
least
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the least
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cars
 passing through
area
Add an article
the area
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 in
this
 chart. Compare to
Harper
Lane
, Long
Lane
 was the highest
number
 of
cars
went
Correct pronoun usage
that went
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 through for the vehicle
traveling
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travelling
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. Compared to other areas, Great York Way was
the
Correct article usage
a
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 medium
number
 of
cars
traveling
Change the spelling
travelling
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 through
roads
Correct article usage
the roads
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.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, cars, harper, lane with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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