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Air pollution is the most important concern of many countries. What are the main causes and effects of this issue?

#air #pollution #concern #countries #effects
Today, our life is very nice because
people
 made things
that
is
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 very
usefule
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useful
to
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in
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 our life.
For example
,
car
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cars
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 and
moterbike
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motorbikes
.
However
,
air
pollution
 is the most important concern of many countries.
This
 essay will show you about what are the main causes and effects of
air
pollution
. As a matter of fact,
air
pollution
 has a number of reasons, two of which will be explained here.
Firstly
, the most important
reasons
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reason
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 is the
car
 because
car
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cars
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 make a lot of CO2 when
people
 use
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the car
a car
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car
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cars
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. So making a lot of CO2 in a day.
Secondly
, some human
activites
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activities
 can be the reasons.For
examole
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example
, they cut down trees for making
papares
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papers
. Recently most
people
 want to big house.
People
 cut down a lot of trees because
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of making
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making
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 spaces
that
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where
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people
 can live. So nature will
dicrease
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decrease
 from time to time. Turning to effect,there are some impacts two of which will be mentioned here.
Firstly
, the most
effect
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 is
the
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grobal
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global
 warming.
Air
pollution
 will increase the temperature.
Also
 melting ice all over the world. If ice will be lost , some animals can not live
in
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 earth.
Furthermore
,
air
pollution
 is our life to effect.
For example
 animal population
decrese
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decrease
also
 nature will be lost. So human is
defficult
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difficult
 to live
in
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the
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earth because natures and animals are important to our
live
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.
In
addition
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 our
helth
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health
air
pollution
 is
bat
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bad
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 for our health too. In
conclude
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,our lives are getting better.
On the other hand
,more rise
air
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in air
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pollution
 in the future. I think
human
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humans
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 are the biggest causes of
air
pollution
.
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