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​​The best way to teach children to cooperate is through team sports at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In a civilized society , children's education has an integral implication in generating a new successful generation . Some assert that the most effective way to boost their sense of
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 is by joining some
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sports
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 at school. From my experience, I do not agree with the viewpoint. It is understandable why teenagers can be taught to cooperate through
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sports
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 . Perhaps
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 could be an opportunity to improve their communication skills , practice regularly
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 help them to harmoniously connect with their peers .
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 , when they play together , they have to organize some logical tactics which ensure victory for themselves .
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 , strengthening
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 can alter the player’s attitudes towards being the winner at all costs , even reaching their purposes in an unsavoury method.
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 make it seem not to be an optimal solution to help children become more cooperative.
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 , there are some alternative ways to enhance children’s
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 without the above disadvantages. One key driving option is that they
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 can get on well with their companions through doing a common assignment or any homework together . Seeing that when they make an effort to do heavy sums , they have to discuss and share ideas to come up with final answers .Another primary option is that the school can organize some outdoor activities , ranging from going camping
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to going sightseeing .
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 not only helps them to be more independent but
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 builds a sense of teamwork when they work together without the pressure to become the winners . These ways might be better than participating in a competitive confrontation.
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 , I would opine that parents and schools can educate children with a sense of
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 through many approaches which are superior to
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sports
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. In conclusion ,
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 it is undeniable the importance of sport , people can not neglect some drawbacks of it,
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 they
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 can use other ways to boost children’s
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