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Completing university education is thought by some to be the best way to get a good job. On the other hand, other people think that getting experience and developing soft skills is more imporant. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Introduction
Many people
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believe
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 that attending university is the perfect way to start a career
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prestigue
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prestige
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on the other hand
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, others believe that soft skills and capabilities are more important and better seen by companies.
Body paragraph 1
Attending university means that once students had finished their studies a certificate is handed to them.
Body paragraph 2
In our modern society it is common for employers to choose workers
concentrating
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 their focus on the
person
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 study career,
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 having a good degree can result in more
working
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 opportunities.
Body paragraph 3
Others think that having a prestigious study career do not
corrispond
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correspond
in
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to
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 having the
neccessary
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necessary
 skill to
perfom
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perform
 in a
high profile
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 job.
Body paragraph 4
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, it is more important to develop abilities by having
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direct experience.
Body paragraph 5
Companies are now asking for skills rather than studies, creating work opportunities for people who can not attend universities mostly
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 of economic
incapabilities
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in capabilities
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.
Body paragraph 6
I believe that having a degree
do
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 not prove a
person
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person's
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 work capabilities
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 it is important to
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 have direct experience in the field.
Conclusion
Taking everything
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 consideration
i
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 can say that future generations are improving constantly, creating more work opportunities and evaluation methods that
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in
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 consideration experiences and skills equally as studies.

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