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Band 4.5

Write a letter of suggestions

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to you, so I can give you some ideas on how to improve community safety. A possible solution is to improve street lighting. By doing
this
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, the visibility at night would be better, making people feel safer walking home.
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 as most of us know, kids stay out later at night during summertime and with good lighting not only the parents will be
more calm
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calmer
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, but the children will not be afraid
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of getting
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getting
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to get
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 home from a
friends
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friend's
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 house. Another way to solve crime is by increasing police patrols on the street.
As a result
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, responses to signals will be much faster.
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, when the patrol is up the street and you see a burglar and call the emergency services, the cops will be at your place
no
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 longer than five minutes. Another solution would be increasing CCTV cameras.
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, the more the
more
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apply
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the
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apply
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cameras the more
deter
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deterring
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 criminals from committing crimes there would be. By summarising all those points,
with
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by
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 taking action not only criminals will be caught but locals would be calm.

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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