In most successful companies, some people think that communication between employers and workers is the most important factor. Other people say that other factors are more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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I am now a student, and my
future
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important
for
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me. Of course, I can’t know how my
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will be, but I can fantasize about it. Now I am going to finish
my
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school.
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my graduation. It
have
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to be wonderful
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of the most memorable moments in my life. I really focused on my exams
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future
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depends on how I pass them. After passing
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, I’m going to go to university and keep
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there. It’s important to me to go
university
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. I want to get higher education and get
good
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job with
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salary. I don’t want to work
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low-qualificated
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low-qualified
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jobs. I want my work to be connected with social
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. I like social
science
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at my school. My social
science
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teacher is
great
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person. She really cares about us and our
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to prepare us in the best way. I study social
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a lot. I want to connect my life with it. I want to research statistics and
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data connected with people and our society. If I couldn’t get to university, I’ll try to become a 3d artist. It’s
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creative profession. As
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artist
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I want to create
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enviroment
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environments
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about the history of the place I want to create.
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I think about my family and its
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about my
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wife and live happily with her.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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