Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisement tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which view point do you agree with? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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Nowadays some beliefs are between in society whether advertisement on
products
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some individuals, they are buying some things
that
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not necessary for them
while
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others say that advertising is
crucial
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part of their lives to get newly developed
products
increased
quality
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the quality
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of
publics
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life. In
this
essay I will present my opinion and why I agree with advertising
effecting
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society to get unnecessary things. First of all, a recent study conclude that marketing policies let
public
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informs about available recently generated
products
to buy
that
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leads to
improve
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quality
standarts
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standards
of
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humans. In a conclusion, advertisements have
huge
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impact on our shopping habits. Some people are buying nonessential
products
which can result in
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home economy because of marketing.
For
this
reason, advertising
shoul
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should
be limited by professionals to keep
individuals
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economy
in
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stable.
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