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Many things which were done in the home by hand in the past are now done by machines. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Introduction
Lots of
activities
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 which are undertaken by people in yesteryears are now completed by gadgets or
machines
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. Let's discuss the
advantages
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 and
disadvantages
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 of it and
then
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 I will discuss the
advantages
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 that outweigh the
disadvantages
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.
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To begin
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 with,Household chores are undertaken by ladies in their homes in the past.
Activities
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 like cleaning and mopping the floor , cooking meals or washing clothes are done by hand only. With the advantage of
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 and gadgets .
However
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 , Most of these
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 are now completed by
machines
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 like vacuum cleaners, microwave ovens or washing
machines
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. In countries like Canada , Homes come with all
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 equipment whether you buy it or take it on rent. So it has many
advantages
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 like saving time
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 and reducing human effort.
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Furthermore
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, Using
machines
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 and gadgets makes our lives depend on them. All these
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 are electrically operated . Making one's life totally dependent on them . It has many
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 like it makes us handicapped if there is no electricity. All the household chores will come to halt .To illustrate, In a country like India Where the supply of electricity is not consistent,lives in urban areas totally depend on
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 . Individuals are not able to complete day-to-day routine
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 .
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 it's a big disadvantage. Another disadvantage consumption of water by these
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for example
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 in cooking , vegetables need to wash before cutting them and preparing a meal for the family.
While
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 Washing
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 requires 2two to five litres of water daily to wash clothes in the washing machine.
Conclusion
To conclude
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, the Utilisation of
machines
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 in household chores makes life comfortable . It
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 makes us dependent on them .
Consequently
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 , the
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 outweigh the
advantages
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 of using It.

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