Some people believe that entertainers are more important than scientist in today’s world. Do you agree or disagree?

We are presently living in the twenty-first century which is recognised as an era of technological advancement. The big question raised presently is which individuals constitute the top strata of

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on the ground of being important to

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. Many

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believe that scientists play the most important role

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a plethora of family opine that

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are more essential. In my view nowadays

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have a bigger necessity than

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. First of all the inventions made by expert help in the progress of

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. To cite an example invention of the bulb was the first successful step of human civilisation to create an illuminating device that can help us see in the absence of the sun.

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contribution made by Thomas Alva Edison made our life easier ,unlike any entertainer.

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us feel happier in a gloomy atmosphere. Listening to songs sung by Celine Dion is one of my favourite hobbies

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I can not imagine having access to the music unless any music system was brought into existence.

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many musicians use musical instruments like

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. The second reason why I believe

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should be given limited regard in

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they are repeatedly observed being involved in activities that are unacceptable

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filthy. To cite an example many movie stars are often observed consuming alcohol or smoking cigarettes. Today's youth often relate themselves to these actors and actresses as their role models. Continuous displays of alcoholism and smoking scenes on television often influence these folk to succumb to these activities without considering the harmful effects. 

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, I believe

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should ensure that

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receive the wide recognition that they are entitled to because of their contribution to

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. Recognition and accolades must be given to them for taking humanity forward with their continuous effort.