Some country have legal ages at which people can drink. Other counties believe not have strict laws is a better policy. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion

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believe it is not a good solution. I agree with the former, it is very important to have
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ages
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with, it is important to children or
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in the crucial period of growth both mentally and physically. If they were allowed to drink without any limitations,
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bad effect on their body. Setting a legal drinking age is the best method to prevent young people from developing
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in later life.
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may help not only to reduce drinking
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injuries and death.
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, we can see from the news numerous teenagers
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, they suffer from many harsh
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including hard problems, liver problems etc.
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, after passing the legal
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, people can decide their own,
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drinking is good for them or not.
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, in Uk, after passing a child 18 year they can
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alcohol
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with their own decision and
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alcohol related
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problem in
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wellbeing
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should not
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some strict
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for
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to
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of any
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, they will damage the future of the country. In my opinion, all
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should set
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a legal age
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ages
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for the people when they drink
alcohol
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