The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010.

The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010.
The chart below shows us information on the percentage of British
people
giving money to charity by
age
range from
eighteen
to sixty-five and more for the years 1990 and 2010. The first thing is that there is a decline in the percentage of
people
in groups
ages
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aged
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apply
eighteen
to fifty, but for groups from fifty-one to sixty-five and, more there is an approximately five per
cent
growth in 2010. The percentage of British
people
in
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ages apply
eighteen
to twenty-five has fallen by ten per
cent
,
while
in the
age
group from twenty-six to
thirty-five
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,thirty-five
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a decline is five per
cent
, and for the
age
group from thirty-six to fifty a decrease amount for a bit more than five per
cent
.
Overall
,
people
from older
age
groups have more temptation to give money to charity, but at the same time,
people
from
eighteen
to thirty-five are likely to avoid providing money to charity.
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