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In some countries, the average weight of people is increasing and their level of health and fitness are decreasing. what do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them.

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Obesity is more common nowadays than it was in the past.
This
 means that a huge amount of the population is at risk
as a consequence
 of their weight increase.
This
 data is even more dramatic considering a significant percentage of the affected individual are children. In
this
 essay, I'll try to discuss the causes of
this
 problem and propose some possible solutions. The rising average weight is mainly caused by unhealthy
food
 consumption. We are getting too lazy to cook our meals. We are surrounded by fast
food
 and we are eating their products very often. To make things worst, their mobile apps are continuously offering appealing coupons and discounts that reward people for their fidelity to their junk
food
. On the marketing level, Fast-foods do a tremendous job in the promotion of their new burgers. In my opinion, junk
food
 promotion should be banned as it is for tobacco products because it could deal incredible damage to people. Another cause of the issue is the lack of physical activity. We should work out more than we are actually doing. Part of the blame goes to the internet and smartphones because the new type of entertainment has quickly taken the place of healthier open-space activities. In
this
 case, a way to contain the problem is to fund incentives for
a
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gym
subscriptions
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.
To sum up
, we should consume healthier
food
 and dedicate more of our free time to sports.
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