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Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology.
In what ways has technology affected the types of relation people make?
Has that become a positive or negative development?

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There might be contentious debates regarding the issue of whether it is advantageous for a lot of
people
 to interact with each other by using various technologies. In
this
 regard,
people
 could have a variety of opinions.
However
, I strongly believe that
communication
 with each other using developed technologies has a huge amount of positive influence on societies. I will write
this
 essay to elucidate how
technology
 affects
people
's
communication
 and my opinion. In modern
society
,
technology
 especially information
technology
 has been increasingly developed, there are two ways to promote human
communication
. First of all, the development of the Internet makes
people
 interact with each other more easily and more frequently, and it allows them to communicate regardless of time and place.
Furthermore
, the wide use of smartphone
enhance
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 convenience and efficiency in
communication
 way. In contemporary
society
, a majority of
people
 have their smartphones, and they are able to interact with each other by using their phones. I am convinced that
this
 phenomenon brings a huge amount of positive effects to human
society
. the first reason is that modern
people
 always are busy, so they are unable to meet with their family and friends face to face,
however
, thanks to
communication
technology
, they can see each other irrespective of time and place. it is a good way to enhance family bonds and friendships.
Moreover
, the increase in
communication
 helps diverse companies create new business models, and it could lead to
a
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 amount of profit
to
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for
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 the companies. Pondering
on
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the aforementioned statement, it is reasonable to take
this
 perspective as the established opinion, and the advantages of
communication
 technologies should be overlooked. In conclusion,
although
 the change in the way
people
 interact with each other could have some negative influence, I am of
opinion
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the opinion
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 the merits of the advanced
communication
 method have much more considerable implications for
society
.
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