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The charts below give information on the consumption of water by agricultural products in Australia in 2014, and the share of income they produced. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information on the consumption of water by agricultural products in Australia in 2014, and the share of income they produced. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts provide data on
water
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 consumption and income generation across six agricultural products in Australia in the year 2014.
Overall
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, it is evident that
although
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 livestock production consumed the highest proportion of
water
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, it generated the lowest income.
On the other hand
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, fruits yielded the highest earnings,
while
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 rice required the least amount of
water
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. Looking at the
water
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 consumption in more detail, it showed that livestock products accounted for the most
water
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 usage at 36%, followed by fruits at 21%, and dairy at 19%.
In contrast
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, sugar, other agricultural goods and rice only used 10%, 9%, and 5% of the total
water
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, respectively.
However
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, despite livestock using the most
water
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, they produced the lowest earnings at only 5% of the total. Fruits,
on the contrary
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, generated the highest revenue among all categories at 36%, followed by dairy at 21%. Even though rice required the least
water
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, it ranked third in terms of revenue generation with 19%,
whereas
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 sugar and other goods shared only 10% and 9% of the total earnings, respectively.
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