The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph demonstrates the
number
of stores that closed and opened from 2011 to 2018.
Overall
, there was a significant increase in
shops
shut down,
while
the
number
of new
shops
has declined throughout the reporting period. In 2011, there were 8,500
shops
in the city,
however
, it underwent a dramatic fall to 4,000
shops
in 2012.
Although
there was a constant rise in the
number
of
shops
at just above 6,000 in 2014, it
then
dropped continuously to 4,000
shops
in 2015. From 2015 onwards, the
number
of new
shops
fluctuated to around 4,000 and ended with a
further
decline of 3,000
shops
in 2018.
By contrast
, there were approximately 6,500
shops
closed in 2011.
Although
there was a slight increase in 2013 with 7,000 shop closures, it experienced a dramatic fall to only 500
shops
closed down in 2015.
However
, it
then
elevated to 5,000 stores terminated their business in 2016 and fluctuated around 5,000 in the next few years.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail landscape
  • net growth
  • market dynamics
  • economic indicators
  • fluctuations
  • pivotal
  • consumption patterns
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • downward/upward trend
  • stabilize
  • recession
  • boom
  • retail sector
  • closure rate
  • inauguration/opening rate
  • consumer market
  • saturate
  • commercial viability
  • profitability
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