The chart shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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A glance at the bar chart provided reveals how many British people took

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future

further

study in terms of

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part time

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in 1970, 1980 and 1990.(unites:thousands)

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it is clear that

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the total number of part-time education was overwhelmingly higher than that of part-time for both genders. More and more women studied in their spare time,

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their counterparts experienced a downward trend over these years.

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, the figure for full-time education

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increased gradually. In terms of part-time

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learning

, the number of

male

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stood at

the

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1000 in 1970, which had a drop to approximately 850 in 1980,

then

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climbed slightly to 900 in 1990.

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, the bottom of

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was nearly 800 at

first,

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which showed a significant increase, peaking at around 1100 in 1990, almost rising by 300

thousands

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. With regards to full-time education, man and women shared a similar development, with under 200 in 1970 each and

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roughly 220 in the

last

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year respectively.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

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162 words

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