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If any child is working under the age of 18 that is known as a child labour. Which causes many problems

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If any
child
 is working under the age of 18
that is
 known as
a
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child
 labour. Which causes many problems. It is very shameful when a
child
 is working as a labour. Today 1.6 million children are still engaged in
child
 labour. It means that children's parents cannot afford the fees for study because of
economic
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 crisis .
Due to
under age
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 working the country's literacy rate
get
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 low. That's why
country
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the country
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 can not achieve their aims and
looses
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their
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 reputation.
This
 is the main reason why
country
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 is not successful. So, the authorities have to stop the
child
 labouring system and
provides
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 some basic needs to their family.They have to make some educational institutes. Where they provide free education to poor people. Make a rule that children and young persons under 18 should not be employed at any
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cost. I think first we have to educate our kids rather than letting them go
for
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 work. Because education is much more important than making money.
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