The diagram below shows the change, which took place in a coastal area called Pentland from 1950 to 2007.

The diagram below shows the change, which took place in a coastal area called Pentland from 1950 to 2007.
This
report will refer to two maps that give information about how the coastal town of Pentland changed over a span of 40- years.
Overall
, in 1950, Pentland was a rural area in comparison with the change process to a residential area throughout a 57-year period.
To begin
with, in 1980, on the north
side
was a half-cup sea. Had tow
roads
, north to south and east to west.
Roads
also
forge areas into four parts. On the west
side
and above the
roads
place was an industrial area.
Additionally
, grassland was on the southeast corner,
whereas
car parking was on the east
side
. Starting in 2007, the sea was later known as the yacht marina and was surrounded by a new road and a park developed beside it. Car parking was relocated to the northwest between a park and a multi-storey and next to it, a swimming pool was constructed.
In addition
, on the south
side
of the
roads
, a cinema was opened up
whereas
opposite houses took place of grassland.
Moreover
, alongside the road, many shops opened and on the northeast, apartments were developed.
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