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Nowadays many people have an unhealthy diet and do not exercise regularly. What are the reasons behind this trend? How can we encourage these people to live a healthy lifestyle?

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In recent times, it has been noted that
people
 are consuming more and more junk and ready-made
food
.
Also
, they are not performing any physical activity.
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this
 essay I will elaborate on its causes and steps to overcome
this
 trend.
Firstly
, in
this
 fast-forward world,
people
 do not have enough
time
.
Although
,
people
 know the consequences of readymade
food
, they are consuming it because they are running short of
time
. hectic work schedule is not allowing them to focus on their body shape.
In addition
,
due to
 digitalization and increasing demand for jobs with technology, individuals are forced to
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 for a longer
time
. which results in obesity.
For instance
, one research indicates that 60% of IT field professionals are suffering from obesity. They
are spending
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 most of their
time
seating
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 in one place to complete a project. After working for a number of hours, they are tired and moving towards easily available and cheap in cost junk
food
 items and not involved in physical activities.
Secondly
, as a solution to encourage their
employers
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employees
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, organizations can provide certain facilities like an open gym at office premises or distribute free yoga class coupons.
Also
, they can encourage their employees to a brisk walk
while
 coming office.
Moreover
, Government authorities can run campaigns on healthy lifestyles to educate
people
 about healthy lifestyles by showing the demerits of unhealthy
food
 items.
As a result
, the public will understand it and will take
time
 to improve their body shape.
To conclude
, in
this
 fast-forward life,
people
 have less
time
 to cook at home and do sports.
Hence
, they are moving towards unhealthy lifestyles.
However
, with the help of some multinational companies, institutes and governments can control it by educating
people
.
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task response
The essay addresses the prompt adequately and provides relevant reasons for the unhealthy lifestyle trend, as well as suggestions for encouraging a healthy lifestyle. The essay demonstrates a general understanding of the topic and maintains a clear focus on the given task.
coherence cohesion
The logical structure is generally clear, with a basic introduction and conclusion. However, there is room for improvement in organizing supporting points within paragraphs and ensuring a more cohesive and coherent development of ideas throughout the essay.

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