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Many children today spend a lot of time on social media which hurts their grades. what is the cause of this? What can be done to solve this ?

#children #time #media #grades
The advent of social
media
 has changed the form of escapism of children. It is alarming that they tend to take
disporpotional
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disproportional
time
 to
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 their social
media
instead
 of cultivating their knowledge. The reason for
this
 phenomenon is the lure of short videos and their
parents
 play an incumbent role to ameliorate
this
 problem. The main reason
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many children squander their precious
time
 on social
media
 is the lure of
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a short
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video
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videos
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. When they touch
in
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the
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social
media
 apps, they can
provisonally
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provisionally
 forget their real world, and immerse themselves in
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 to relax. Through each
video
 which students watch,
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 can calculate exactly their inclination, and continue to suggest new videos matching them.
Therefore
, they are trapped in
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vicious
 circle of exchanging their
time
 for surfing the Internet.
This
 paves the way for their poor academic results as they are devoid of
time
 to cultivate their knowledge.
As a result
, they lag behind their peer. In order to solve
this
 problem,
parents
 ought to encourage them
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involve
involved
 in physical activities in the leisure
time
 of their offspring and limit
their
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time
 taken
in
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 their technology gadgets. Spending spare
time
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 in sports, offspring no longer have
time
 to use their phone to play
game
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games
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 let alone surf their social
media
.
In contrast
, when they have superfluous spare
time
, they would start reading some
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news
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 on their accounts and end up
with
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watching
video
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videos
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uncontrolably
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uncontrollably
. In
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,
due to
 the lure of the short
video
in
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Facebook
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watch
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, Youtube shorts or Instagram reels, it is difficult for
chidren
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children
control
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 their
time
 by themselves.
Thus
, the support of
parents
 is indispensable in
this
 situation. In conclusion,
the
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parents
 ought to limit their children’s
time
 using social
media
app
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,
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 and encourage them to participate in physical
activites
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activities
activity
.
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this
 way, their offspring can
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shun social
media
 addiction.
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