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The plans show an office university in 2005 and the same office now.

The plans show an office university in 2005 and the same office now.
The layouts illustrate how the university
office
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 has changed over eighteen years.
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, we can see that the
office
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 now features fewer rooms and is more open-plan compared to the past. Some furniture has been rearranged
while
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 some new
office
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 equipment and appliances have
also
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 been added. One of the main changes involves the removal of two rooms on the right top corner and on the left bottom corner of the
office
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.
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, desks, chairs and cabinets have been removed from both rooms.
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, the meeting area for four people has been created on the northeastern corner.
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, the main room by the entrance has expanded into an open area with a new sofa and table,
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 the armchairs and noticeboard have been relocated from
eastern
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the eastern
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 to
western
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the western
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 side beside the new furniture. A new water cooler and coffee machine have been servicing
this
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 new area as well.

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