Some people say that economic growth is the only way to end hunger and poverty, while others say that economic growth is damaging the environment so it must be stopped. To what extent you agree?

Some
people
argue that economic growth is the best way to
end
starvation and poverty.
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, a group of
people
says that rising the economic status of the country will affects negatively on the
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and should be stopped, I really agree with both groups and
this
essay will discuss both views. Nowadays, most countries tend to develop their economic status to cease
the
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poverty by creating job opportunities. Under these circumstances,
people
can find
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and
at the
end
of
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month
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they can get
salary
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.
For example
, in
Jordan
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the authorities employ more than ten
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person every year just to prevent
this
problem and rise
citizen’s
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satisfaction.
In addition
to that, when a country has
good
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economic status it can make the study in universities affordable for all
people
.
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,
people
will get
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bachelor
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degree
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and they can find
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career
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for
them
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. Despite economic development will enhance the
quality-of-life
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for the population, it
also
will damage our environment. Some governments tend to improve
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budget by building
industiral
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industrial
facilities and factories, and these use fossil fuels to operate their machines.
Therefore
, the co2 level in the atmosphere will be increased and
also
global warming.
Moreover
, some companies throw their
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in the ocean and it will lead to
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poison
the marine creatures.
For
this
reason, some of
endangered
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species that live in oceans will
end
in
next
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centuries.
To conclude
that
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,
economic
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not only will
end
the
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starvation and make
people
live in peace but
also
it
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has negative impacts on
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eco system
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ecosystem
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.
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