The line graph gives information about the proportion of students from age 18-25 years old universities in four various areas (Singapore, Malaysia, Philippines, Thailand) since 1961 to 2011.

The line graph gives information about the proportion of students from age 18-25 years old universities in four various areas (Singapore, Malaysia, Philippines, Thailand) since 1961 to 2011.
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The line graph gives information about the proportion of students from age 18-25
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universities
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in universities
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in four various areas (Singapore,
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, Philippines, Thailand)
since
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1961 to 2011.
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, it is clear from the graph that there was an increase in the number of students in all countries over the given period.
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the
graph
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it is obvious that in 1961 the highest proportion of students in academic institutions was in Thailand, which accounted for around 25%.
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, the lowest number was in
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, which constituted below 5%. Thailand fluctuated slightly over the next 30
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and decreased by around 5%.
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rose dramatically and reached a peak of 43%. In comparison with
Singapore
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there was a significant fluctuation from 1961 to 2011 and
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40%. As for
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the Philippines
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Philippines
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there was
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stability over the first ten
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by almost 7%.
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,
Malaysia
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went up gradually during that period and reached one in ten. Both
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two
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countries had
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similar trend in the following 20
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they rose steadily and in 1991 both of them had the same figure, which was 15 %.
Malaysia
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levelled off during the next twenty
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • enrollment rates
  • demographic
  • tertiary education
  • fluctuations
  • incremental rise
  • decline
  • plateau
  • significant surge
  • economic indicators
  • educational reform
  • policy implementation
  • socioeconomic factors
  • projected growth
  • benchmarking
  • statistical analysis
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