The line graph gives information about the proportion of students from age 18-25 years old universities in four various areas (Singapore, Malaysia, Philippines, Thailand) since 1961 to 2011.

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The line graph gives information about the proportion of students from age 18-25

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in four various areas (Singapore,

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, Philippines, Thailand)

since

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1961 to 2011.

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, it is clear from the graph that there was an increase in the number of students in all countries over the given period.

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it is obvious that in 1961 the highest proportion of students in academic institutions was in Thailand, which accounted for around 25%.

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, the lowest number was in

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, which constituted below 5%. Thailand fluctuated slightly over the next 30

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and decreased by around 5%.

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rose dramatically and reached a peak of 43%. In comparison with

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there was a significant fluctuation from 1961 to 2011 and

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40%. As for

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the Philippines

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Philippines

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stability over the first ten

years

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by almost 7%.

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Malaysia

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went up gradually during that period and reached one in ten. Both

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countries had

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similar trend in the following 20

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they rose steadily and in 1991 both of them had the same figure, which was 15 %.

Malaysia

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levelled off during the next twenty

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Mix of complex & simple sentences

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Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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192 words

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