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Homelessness in increasingly in many major city's around the world. What are the problem and give solutions.

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plethora of homeless
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overpopulation
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numerous homeless person
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moving
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be situated, is not humans and growing plants. The government says they are
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 and they are in given to
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 and they help to homeless
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own
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home
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.  Having considered a range of arguments, the substantial impact of
this
 houseless matter increasing in many major cities situated around the world has sparked controversy over the potential impact in recent years. It can be concluded that I firmly advocate that
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people
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area
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likewise
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people
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  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

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  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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