a lot of places in the world rely on tourism as a main source of income. Unfortunately, tourism can also be a source of problems if it is not manage correctly. Describe the merits and demerits of tourism in the world. Do you think that benefits of tourism outweigh it's drawbacks.

Today,a
lot
of
place
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places
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in the world rely on
tourism
as the most source of income.
However
,
tourism
able to be a source of problems if it
is not manage
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is not managed
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correctly.I think that
advantages
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the advantages
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of
tourism
outueigh
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outweigh
it is drawbacks.
This
essay will address why the benefits of
tourism
outueigh
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outweigh
drowbacks
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drawbacks
and will include relevant examples to support
this
position. On the one hand, there are several advantages of
tourism
.
Firstly
,
tourism
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tourists
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want
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wants
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to buy
someting
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something
famous in the
country
.So they spend a
lot
of money.
In addition
,sightseeing spot and present
is
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are
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very expensive.
Secondly
,
tourism
is the most important to develop the
country
because tourists post
phots
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photos
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on the internet.
For example
,
the
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apply
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instagram
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Instagram
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.
The
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instagram
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is the most popular application and effect to
our
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ours
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.
Especarly
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Especially
young
people
.So a
lot
of
people
can know what is
famousse
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famous
in
this
cuntry
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country
by tourists posting photos.
On the other hand
,there are
sseveral
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several
disadvantages of
tourisms
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tourism
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.
Firstly
,
tourisms
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tourists
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do not know the rules of the
country
they are
traveling
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travelling
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to.
Such
as
japanese
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Japanese
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rules prohibit leaving trash on the
streer
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street
.
Tourisms
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Tourists
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do not follow the rule of the
country
they are
traveling
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travelling
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to. So,local
people
an
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have an
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unpleasant feeling.
Secondly
, sometimes
tourist
is troubled
becouse
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because
different
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of different
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language. So
tourist
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tourists
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can not read
menu
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the menu
a menu
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. In conclusion,
tourst
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tourists
have disadvantages.
However
,
tourist
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tourism
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is the most important to develop the
country
becouse
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because
tourist
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tourists
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spend a
lot
of money
the
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on the
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country
they are
traving
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travelling
to.
Also
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,Also
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they
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apply
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posting
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a photo
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photo
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photos
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is
most
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the most
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effect
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effective
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to
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for
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people
.
Especary
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Especially
young
people
. So I
bellive
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believe
belive
that
benefits
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the benefits
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of
tourism
outweight
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outweigh
it is
drawbancks
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drawbacks
.
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