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The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree courses. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree courses. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart illustrates what ways
Anthropology
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 graduate
students
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 from a particular university did after finishing their bachelor's degree and the table provides information about their income after working for 5 years.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the direction of graduate
students
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 in full-time
work
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 is the highest percentage,
while
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 part-time
work
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 and postgrad student are the smallest rates, including the amount of
anthropology
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 graduates' salary in the government sector, which is the highest salary compared with others.
To begin
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, the final destination of
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 graduate
students
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 is full-time
work
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 which is 52%.
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, the number of
students
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 who do part-time
work
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 and postgrad study is the least rate by 5%.
Similarly
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, in terms of full-time postgrad study and unknown data, these
students
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 have the same proportions with 8%. On top of
this
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, people who are doing part-time
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 are much more than people who are unemployed which is 3%. Turning to the amount of income of
students
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 who graduated from the faculty of
anthropology
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, the segment of people who are working in the government sector has the largest salaries after 5 years'
work
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 which is 50% (100,000+ dollars). Meanwhile, the number of
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students
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 who are working at private companies has the smallest wage about 25,000-49,999 dollars which is 10%, followed by the group of freelance consultants and the government sector which are the same percentage (5%).
Similarly
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,
groups
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 with an income of about 50,000-74,999 dollars, the former has the same data as the latter which is 15%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "similarly".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words anthropology, students, work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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