The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The illustration explains how to process

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from

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cane.

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, it is can be seen that the product contains 7 stages beginning with planting

sugar

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canes

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and ending with a finished product being dried and cooled.

To begin

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sugar

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canes

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are grown by using water, sunlight, fertilisers, and sufficient supplements for those

sugar

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canes

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, so it takes time over 12-18 months. After that, it is harvested by a farmer and a tractor

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it is transferred to a crushing machine which is able to transform these

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canes

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into

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cane

juice

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but

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stage is not enough to control several microbial which is not adequate hygiene.

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, it is lead to purified

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processing which has a limestone filler for making more purified

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. In the fifth stage, purified

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is delivered to the step of evaporation, it is transformed into syrup using fire from gas.

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the syrup is brought to the centrifuge's step, it has to separate

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crystals.

Finally

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this

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clear

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is dried and cooled in a large tank which is ready for packing and launching into a supermarket.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

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3 paragraphs

185 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

manufacturing process
sugar cane
harvesting
transporting
factory
crushing
extracting
juice
filtering
impurities
heating
evaporating
syrup
boiling
crystallizing
sugar
separating
drying
packaging
distribution
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The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

In many countries, children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility. Discuss both those views and give your own opinion.

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Scientific research should be funded by governments rather than commercial organizations. To what extent do you agree or disagree?