The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The illustration explains how to process

sugar

from

sugar

cane.

Overall

, it is can be seen that the product contains 7 stages beginning with planting

sugar

canes

and ending with a finished product being dried and cooled.

To begin

sugar

canes

are grown by using water, sunlight, fertilisers, and sufficient supplements for those

sugar

canes

, so it takes time over 12-18 months. After that, it is harvested by a farmer and a tractor

then

it is transferred to a crushing machine which is able to transform these

sugar

canes

into

sugar

cane

juice

but

this

stage is not enough to control several microbial which is not adequate hygiene.

Therefore

, it is lead to purified

juice

processing which has a limestone filler for making more purified

juice

. In the fifth stage, purified

juice

is delivered to the step of evaporation, it is transformed into syrup using fire from gas.

Next,

the syrup is brought to the centrifuge's step, it has to separate

sugar

crystals.

Finally

this

clear

sugar

is dried and cooled in a large tank which is ready for packing and launching into a supermarket.

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3Word repetition
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0Grammar mistakes
 

3 paragraphs

185 words

5.50

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

manufacturing process
sugar cane
harvesting
transporting
factory
crushing
extracting
juice
filtering
impurities
heating
evaporating
syrup
boiling
crystallizing
sugar
separating
drying
packaging
distribution
stage
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