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Many countries now face an economic downturn so it is better for each country to focus on its own problems rather than helping other countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support your position.

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In recent times, we
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observe
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observed
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 a very big decline in economic conditions.
This
 is observed in many countries across the globe. In these situations, I totally agree with the statement countries should help each other to solve
this
 problem.
This
 essay will provide reasons and examples to support why they should help each other in
this
 situation. Most of the countries in today's world are developing. They are dependent on each other for essential resources.
For example
, India and Pakistan are dependent on the
middle east
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Middle East
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for oil.
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middle east
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Middle East
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 is dependent on food supplies from others. If
this
 trade is stopped or prices of essential goods are increased in these conditions
then
 the situation will only become worse. Another reason is exploitation. During the 19th ,century United Kingdom and France colonised many African and
south
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 Asian states. They are poor today because of
this
 reason.
For instance
, India was a British colony for almost 2 centuries. During that time most of India's resources are plundered.
This
 is one of the reasons why we are seeing an economic downturn these days in
such
 places. It would be a moral obligation of the richer ones to help the poor ones.
To conclude
, it is very much necessary for governments to help each other in these dire situations as most of them are interdependent or
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were a victim to one another at one point in time.
However
, if help is not provided
then
 the economic conditions will decline problem.
Hence
, helping each other is very much necessary.
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