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The tendency for human beings to copy one another is shown in the popularity of fashions in clothes and other consumer goods. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It's true that, nowadays, many people have a tendency to
wearing
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same
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 latest
clothes
 and other personal goods
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 from another human. In
this
 given statement, I totally agree because it is becoming times requirements.
To begin
 with, it is undeniable that, in recent times many people try to be
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 of attention, and gain
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 reputation in front of
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society. In my opinion,
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celebrities contribute to the trend.
This
 is because
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 they are should wear trending
clothes
,
in addition
, they have
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contract
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 with brand companies. To quote
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, these situations
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 addiction among individuals
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 trendy items. As an example, we can see wide world peoples have their role
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,
moreover
,
this
 condition simultaneously
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 imitate
to
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their
clothes
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 style, and personality,
as well as
 their characteristics.
On the other hand
, I believe that
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the
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social media
also
 contribute to
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 one another by sharing their experiences and opinions about
clothes
 or products which is can cause
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 decisions of others. As an example, in my country, the telegram app most useful program in recent times, and many young and old generations spent their time
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chatting and discussing
about
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certain
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topic
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.
According to
 national marketing reports,
this
 point influence to rise cope one's opinions and personal perspectives. In conclusion,
it is clear that
 humans have a tendency to copy someone's ideas
,
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 when it comes to fashion and consumer goods.
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this
 trend will
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 their thinking capacity in the near future. For that, they should dedicate themselves to
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 mundane knowledge
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