The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart gives
the
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information on the proportions of citizens' different
coffee
and
tea
buying behaviours and drinking habits. The survey was conducted in five Australian cities in
last
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4 weeks. Sydney saw the largest proportion, nearly 45%, of people buying fresh
coffee
, but that was not as much as
intant
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instant
intent
coffee
consuming. The figure(42%) for Melbourne was a little lower than that. Over
a
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half of
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the individules
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individules
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individuals
in Hobart bought instant
coffee
in
last
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4 weeks, which is the biggest figure among all these cities,
although
the gap with
other
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four cities
were
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not extremely obvious. With regards to residents' drinking habits, the highest percentage of them going to a cafe for
coffee
or
tea
happened in Melbourne and Hobart, with 64% and 63% respectively.
While
Adelaide saw the least proportion(under 35%) of citizens enjoying their
coffee
and
tea
in
such
kind of place. In summary, people in Melbourne and Hobart
prefered
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preferred
to drink
coffee
or
tea
in a cafe,
while
individules
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individuals
in Sydney generally liked buying
coffee
, fresh and instant
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, the most.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey
  • coffee
  • tea
  • buying habits
  • drinking habits
  • Australian cities
  • consumption
  • respondents
  • regular
  • participants
  • levels
  • observed
  • popular
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