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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart gives
the
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information on the proportions of citizens' different
coffee
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 and
tea
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 buying behaviours and drinking habits. The survey was conducted in five Australian cities in
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last
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 4 weeks. Sydney saw the largest proportion, nearly 45%, of people buying fresh
coffee
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, but that was not as much as
intant
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instant
intent
coffee
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 consuming. The figure(42%) for Melbourne was a little lower than that. Over
a
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half of
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the individules
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individules
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individuals
 in Hobart bought instant
coffee
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 in
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last
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the last
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 4 weeks, which is the biggest figure among all these cities,
although
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 the gap with
other
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the other
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 four cities
were
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 not extremely obvious. With regards to residents' drinking habits, the highest percentage of them going to a cafe for
coffee
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 or
tea
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 happened in Melbourne and Hobart, with 64% and 63% respectively.
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 Adelaide saw the least proportion(under 35%) of citizens enjoying their
coffee
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 and
tea
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 in
such
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 kind of place. In summary, people in Melbourne and Hobart
prefered
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preferred
 to drink
coffee
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 or
tea
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 in a cafe,
while
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individules
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individuals
 in Sydney generally liked buying
coffee
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, fresh and instant
ones
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, the most.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, while".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, tea with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey
  • coffee
  • tea
  • buying habits
  • drinking habits
  • Australian cities
  • consumption
  • respondents
  • regular
  • participants
  • levels
  • observed
  • popular
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