The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The maps illustrate the developed scheme of the centre of a small
town
called Islip which will happen in the future and depict the map in the present. 
Overall
, it is readily apparent that the
town
will transform a lot, the developer will demolish the main road and the northern
side
of the
town
will add more buildings,
while
some buildings will remain in
town
. On the northern
side
of Islip
town
, the countryside will be developed by adding a new main street which can connect to the
town
.
Moreover
, after the main will cleared, they will add a shopping centre, bus station, car park and a new residential area on the northeast
side
which nearby the main street.
According to
the south
side
, some housing will remain but there will have fresh housing where close to the main road. Not only the housing is staying in the same areas, but
also
a school and a park that there will increase spaces for them.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words town, side with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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