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Many people argue that eating junk food has led to an unhealthy lifestyle. This problem has become more common among young people these days. Do you agree or disagree that junk food is the cause of the issue?

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Nowadays, unhealthy
lifestyle
 among young
people
 has become increasingly common. Some
people
 argue that
this
 issue stems from
consumption
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the consumption
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 of
junk
food
. I believe that it is unrealistic to lay the blame for all health problems on
the
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apply
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junk
food
, we must
also
 consider other factors which lead to
unhealthy
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an unhealthy
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lifestyle
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lifestyles
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. First and foremost,
consumption
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the consumption
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 of
junk
food
 has an adverse effect
to
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on
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 the well-being of young
people
 for several reasons. The main harm comes from
thier
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their
 poor
nutriental
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nutrient
 content. Scientific studies show that consuming
junk
food
such
 as fast
food
 or packaged
food
 has
less
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fewer
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 nutrients than healthy
food
, which can lead to obesity and chronic diseases. Young
people
 who eat low nutritional
food
 are bound to suffer from less than healthy
lifestyle
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lifestyles
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.
On the other hand
, other significant factors behind unhealthy
lifestyle
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lifestyles
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 among young
people
 should be considered. In the first place, lack of exercise is the most common cause. Since children are confined to home when watching TV, they are bound to adopt a sedentary
lifestyle
.
While
 in the past most young
people
 spent time
to
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on
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 outdoor activities and
played
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playing
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 sports, these days they can
satisify
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satisfy
 themselves by watching TV or playing video games and just they stuck at home. Having considered the main factors behind the unhealthy
lifestyle
, I am inclined to say that part of the blame for
this
 lies
on
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in
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junk
food
,
while
 insufficient exercise and indoor entertainment
are equally contribute
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equally contribute
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 to
this
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dietary habits
  • self-control
  • advertising
  • appealing
  • convenience culture
  • fast food
  • obesity rates
  • nutritional education
  • affordability
  • psychological effects
  • well-being
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