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The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000.Average distance in miles travelled per person per year

The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000.Average distance in miles travelled per person per year
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The tables illustrate information about the average
distance
 in
miles
 travelled per person per year with various transportation modes in England between 1985 and 2000. There are eight modes of transportation namely on foot, bicycle, car, local
bus
, long-
distance
bus
, train, taxi, and other. In 2009, People walking become 237 slightly decreased from 1985 with 255
avarage
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average
 distances in
miles
. The bicycle became 41 and it decreased from 1985 with 51 average
distance
 in
miles
. Local
bus
bacame
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became
 4806 from 3199 in 1985. Long-
distance
bus
 in 1985 was 429 average
distance
 in
miles
 and it
was
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decreased in 2000 became 274.
Train
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The train
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 was 289 in 1985 and slightly
incerased
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increased
 in 2000 became 366 average
distance
 in
miles
. Taxi in 2000 was 42 and it
was
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apply
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slightly increased from 1985. Other in 2000 increased became 585 from 450 in 1985.
To sum up
, in 1985 the number was 4740 it
was
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apply
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increased in 2000
became
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and became
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 2000. In 2000 People in England highly used
car
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cars
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 with
4806
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a 4806
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avarage
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average
distance
 in
miles
, and
then
 others with
585
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a 585
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avarage
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average
distance
 in
miles
, the third mode
was train
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was trained
was training
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 with 366
avarage
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average
distance
 in
miles
, local
bus
 in the next position with 237
avarage
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average
distance
 in
miles
, on foot is 237
avarage
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average
distance
 in
miles
, and the long-
distance
bus
 was 274, after that taxi with 42, and the
last
 one is
bicycle
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a bicycle
show examples
 with 41
avarage
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average
distance
 in
miles
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words distance, miles, bus, avarage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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