Advertising influence people to buy things such as clothes and shoes. What are the problems caused by that? What solution should be given?

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Advertisement , marketing a product is the main technique

reap

Fix the infinitive

to reap

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more benefits by growing the sales of that particular product .

The

Correct article usage

People

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people

Use synonyms

are

Unnecessary verb

apply

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purchase different new things for apps and

advertises

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Your opinion

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If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Word repetition
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

350 words

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Your opinion

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