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Some people believe that children should not be given homework every day, while others believe that they must get homework every day in order to be successful at school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There are people, who believe that children should not be given extra pressure like
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 by their teachers at the same
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 there are individuals who opine that
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homework
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 mandatory in a student's life. In
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 essay, I will go through both sides of the argument and will explain my support for the latter view. In
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 modern world, there are people who don't give much importance to education, they are the ones who argue that
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 isn't important in a schooling period. The reason behind it may be increasing pressure among them as children used to spend a majority of their valuable
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 in school they at least spend 8 hours there ,
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 a hectic schedule.
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, it is not a good concept not to have any
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 but both the parents and authorities should try to maintain a proper timetable even for studying and for leisure purposes. It is important that young ones need to spend
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 in both studies and extracurricular activities.
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 to the next argument, educated people will always give importance to education, They are those who claim that
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 and
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 are mandatory in a child's life. Apart from all these, having some duties will help to make a child punctual in his or her work. More than
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, children will be capable
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 their work.
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, there are weaker or lazy students who aren't interested in studies so
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 school work will
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 help them to do their duties because these works need to be submitted in front of the teachers. In conclusion,
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 school
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 and assignment need to be mandatory as it is beneficial to students. Anyway, it is
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 important to have
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 for leisure activities , from the above statement
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 studies and extracurricular activities are important in a student's life so always take the necessary measures to ensure it.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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