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the table show the average length of video advertisements on the internet and average length of time viewers spend watching them summarise the information by selecting and reporting the mian features, and make comparisions where revelant.

the table show the average length of video advertisements on the internet and average length of time viewers spend watching them summarise the information by selecting and reporting the mian features, and make comparisions where revelant.
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The graph illustrates the different types of advertisements and their longevity
as well as
 the average amount of
seconds
 that people spent watching them.
Overall
, the longest advertisement videos are the ones that promote public service,
also
 viewers
tend
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totend
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 watch
it
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them
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 longer than the rest of
types
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the types
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. The videos that promote various services
such
 as public, financial and home furnishing are usually longer. Public and financial services have
the
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a
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 gap of almost 20
seconds
 between them (45 and 27) but viewed time is relatively the same (18 and 16) In
case
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the case
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 of home furnishing,
this
 type is the
most short
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from
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in
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this
 category. The rest kinds are units of distinct categories. Automotive and entertainment share
the
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a
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 similar length of 27
seconds
,
however
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,however
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 consumers prefer to watch automotive ads 4
seconds
 longer. Commercials
of
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for
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the
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apply
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travel, consumer electronics, pharmaceuticals, clothing and other
retails
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retail
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 range between 14 and 21
seconds
 for full-length ,
whereas
 normally people watch them
4
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for 4
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-13
seconds
. It can be seen that individuals prefer service ads more than the rest of
kinds
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the kinds
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.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words seconds with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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