The diagram shows the process of making the soft cheese

The diagram shows the process of making the soft cheese
The picture illustrates the multiple-stage process of how soft cheese is made. In order to make cheese some raw materials
such
as
water
and mild are used.
It is clear that
the process contains 5 steps which begin with mixing
water
and milk. In the next steps the
mixture
sometimes is cooled and sometimes heated. In the first three ,steps several processes are taken.
Firstly
, It begins with mixing milk and
water
then
in the next step the combination of substances is cooled for two
hours
at under 5 degrees of celsius after that before the third stage, salt is added to the
mixture
and just after ,that the
mixture
is going to fermentation by heating for 2
hours
in 35 degrees of
celsius
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Celsius
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. In the next
stations
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station
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, the
mixture
is heated until the
water
is boiled,
this
stage is take 8
hours
long and ,
finally
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in the
last
step it is cooled again for 8
hours
at a low temperature of about 5 degrees delicious the final outcomes are soft cheese and
water
which are passed on filters separately.
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