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The chart shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph provides information about how often the United states household consumed junk
food
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 from restaurants during the decade.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the percentage of
people
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 who ate fast
food
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 once or twice a month in 2013 is the highest rate,
while
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 the number of
people
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 who consumed fast
food
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 every day for 10 years was the smallest rate.
To begin
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,
people
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 in the
USA
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 who ate convenience
food
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 every day for 10 years was the least percentage which was just under 5%.
Then
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, the number of the
USA
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 household that consumed fast
food
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 once a week and once or twice a month was a substantial trend, there reached a peak at around 33% in 2006 and 2013.
However
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, some
people
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 in the
USA
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 rarely eat junk
food
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 a few times a year, 2003, witnessed a dramatic decrease of just under 15%
then
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 after 3 years, there was a slight increase of just around 15% and
also
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 in 2013.
Moreover
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, the number of the
USA
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 population never eat fast
food
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 before just under 5% over the decade.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, people, usa with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fast food consumption
  • dining frequency
  • decade overview
  • trend analysis
  • to dine out
  • fluctuation
  • sharp increase
  • gradual decline
  • eating habits
  • statistical comparison
  • consuming pattern
  • noteworthy change
  • anomaly
  • periodic comparison
  • data interpretation
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