Crime appears to be rising in most countries in the world, especially among young people. What the possible causes of this trend, and what solutions would be effective reducing crime level?

The world has seen an increase in crime in the
last
few decades,which has concerned world leaders for all the right reasons.Some main reasons for
this
trend are poverty,lack of
opportunities
for youth,and the glamorization of the criminals by
media
.Possible solutions for these problems would be taking steps to overcome poverty,providing
opportunities
for youngsters to polish their skills and excel in a field of work,and censorship of
media
.
Firstly
,poverty is the mother of crime.Unlawful activities are usually a result of not being able to provide for the family.
For instance
,the robber shot dead in the Lahore bank robbery was head to toe under financial loans,and he probably took
a
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such
steps to get rid of
this
mess.Governments should take measures to pull their population up from the underprivileged class.
Such
steps could include low-interest loans for the public,scholarships for students,food and shelter for disabled people,and setting up
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a small businesses
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for the jobless.
Hence
,deprivation is the root cause of unlawful activities which could be tackled with measures from the state.
Secondly
, youngsters do not have enough
opportunities
in order to groom their abilities and utilize them in a productive manner,which is
also
another cause of law offences.
For example
,a teenager who had financial knowledge, and opted
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laundering could be trained to prevent
such
felonies.
Thus
,lack of skill utilization is another cause of crimes which could be prevented by training the young ones in their field of interest.
Lastly
, the glamorization of criminals by the
media
is another major reason for the increase in crime rates.Currently, the
media
portrays felons as some sort of
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,which inspires teenagers.
Consequently
,unaware of the end of
such
offenders,youngsters opt for
criminal
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life.
Media
should be censored strictly,in regards to both its contents and viewership.
Therefore
,lawbreakers should be discouraged and never be allowed to be glorified in the
media
.
To conclude
,offences and violations of the law have increased in the
last
few decades.The reason
are
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,
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depreciation,low
opportunities
for the youth,and glorification of violators.In order to get rid
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curse,governments should take deep consideration in solving these issues.
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