For a long time art has been considered an essential part of all cultures in the world. However , nowadays people's values have changed , and we tend to consider science , technology and business more than arts. What do you think are the causes of this? What can be done to draw people's attention to art?

For ages,
art
has played an integral role in cultures around the world.
However
, in the modern world , it no longer has
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popularity because
people
are paying more attention to
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other subjects
such
as business , technology and science.
This
is because
,
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people
have a desire for earning
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money. From my point of view, artists or
people
who
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with
art
,
they
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do not have
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to earn a lot. Fundamentally , there are myriad reasons behind
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of interest in
art
by humans.
Firstly
, automation and science is the major cause . Nowadays , almost every individual uses technology
such
as smartphones and computers . That's why they have no interest in
art
or
not
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have time for
art
.
Secondly
, business studies attract many
people
to become richer. It seems to me ,
art
studies are not valuable ,
therefore
, they have totally
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arts
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from their life.
Lastly
, historical knowledge
knowledge
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makes individuals feel that arts
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have not any importance in their culture and tradition.
However
, there are some measures to increase
people
's interest in
art
. The government must show
people
about
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importance in history and at present. If
this
solution is performed,
people
's curiosity will rise.
Moreover
, adults must show
value
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the value
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of
art
to
young
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generation. In conclusion, there
are
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number
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of reasons why
people
today
usually
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are usually
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indifferent to
art
and some measures can solve
this
problem.
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