Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co operate rather than compete become more useful adults Discuss both these views and give your opinions.

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Certain individuals believe that
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among
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peers should be inspired.
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, others consider that youngsters who are educated to collaborate with others rather than match are going
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more useful when
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older.
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competitiveness is healthy and adequate it should remain
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the
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part of
children
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development. There are many reasons why
rivalry
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should be encouraged. Parents should teach them not to stop on the achieved and bo better than they did.
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, parents need to explain that competitiveness has
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limit
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. They need to understand it can lead to some problems like burnout and
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aggression
.
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good example of
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competition
is competition with yourself. You have to do better than you did yesterday or a week ago.
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kind of vying will be healthy for everyone.
On the other hand
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, other people consider that being co
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is way better than being
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competitive
. They think
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rivalry
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will only bring problems during
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work.
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co operation
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cooperation
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does all the work.
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is not enough. Children need to compete with each other to produce better results.
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, at school students tend to compete
while
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doing something. It
encoursges
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encourages
them to perform better. In conclusion, I want to say that healthy
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should be present in children. They need to have a sense of competitiveness as long as it is healthy and adequate. It will only make them better.
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, it will help them to perform better now and in the future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sense of competition
  • motivation and personal growth
  • competitive environment
  • strong work ethic
  • real-life scenarios
  • stand out and differentiate
  • essential social skills
  • common goals
  • personal and professional life
  • community and collective success
  • shared success
  • altruistic and compassionate behavior
  • reduce pressure and anxiety
  • less stressful
  • enhanced mental well-being
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