The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.

Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.

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The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

It is important for everyone, including young people, to save money for their future.

You were absent from an important event held by the company you work for. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: Apologize for your absence and explain the reasoning? Explain why you had to be at the other event? Explain what you will do to catch up?

In many countries, parents are deciding to have children later in their lives. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

In today’s society, both Western medicine and traditional complementary forms of medicines’ are now widely known and used. The effectiveness of these kinds of treatment is determined by the patient’s mental attitude towards it. To what extent do you agree?